This week I have been using a range of language features to help make my writing more descriptive. Some language features we have been talking about are similes, metaphors, personification and onomatopoeia.

Hear are my favourite sentences please give me feed back.

Wissssssssssssssh! I can feel the breeze racing across my face   as I was running across the soccer field with the Nike soccer ball then i just got half way and I looked at the crowd and sore people holding up banners then I felt amazed so I kept on running and i got near the goal so i kicked  as hard as i could and it went into the goal and i heard a Whistle that was the reaf four half time luchelele i got the Nike soccer ball into the big goal.